There was a time when he’d fear nothing more than the bluntness of the empty bottle his torment his nightmare, his hell The bottle would be all right as long as it stayed full It was like Lucifer before the fall Oh, but once it emptied then it would change completely Then he’d see father’s grip reverse on its neck and turn it into a blunt weapon that delivered its fair share of bruises and scabs on the scalp It never broke like in the movies but it surely hit harder than wood But in the end after all those years of standing in its greenish shadow he found himself thanking the bottle It’s simple What you don’t pick up you don’t end up holding He never touched a beer in his life and certainly didn’t use the bottle as a blunt weapon against anybody not even against his own father as revenge The cleaver was far more effective
a blunt weapon

That made me chuckle….
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(*゚∀゚)つ=lニニフ Me too when I wrote it :))
The ending seemed a bit cliché, but I left it there anyway.
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Dark and feels very real.
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Thanks (。^‿^。)
Good thing it’s not real though ヅ
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Didn’t expect the ending 🤪
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ミ ᕕ(ᐛ) ᕗ Me neither when I wrote it, but it just showed up :))
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LOL. The last line. I didn’t see it coming.
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Hah, neither did the father
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So awesome… Love the darkness, great story… 😊🌹
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Thanks!
There’s a lot of magic in darkness
/╲/\╭( ͡°͡° ͜ʖ ͡°͡°)╮/\╱\
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No, I didn’t see that coming.
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ᗜԅ(⇀︿⇀)ᓄ-¤]═──── (×_×)
Cleavers can solve problems, I guess :))
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the ending was surprising; I didn’t see it coming; masterfully paced; glad I read it 🙂
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\(^O^)/
I too am very glad you read it, John
Thank you 🙂
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hang on, it’s so good, I’m going to read it again 🙂 it’s even getting a guernsey in my commonplace book 🙂
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(ノ・ω・)ノ♥ YEY!!
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Evocative writing! And that last line… *chef’s kiss*
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(ノ・ω・)ノ♥ Big Thanks!!
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Ha!
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٩( ᐛ )و Ha Ha
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You got me Bogdan… couldn’t help but unexpectedly smile at this poem’s poetic-justice-y sense of humour. :)) Well written, I was definitely on the side of the main character. And such a takeaway: “what you don’t pick up, you don’t end up holding…” WOW! So simple, so true. 🔆
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(๑*ᗜ*) Thank you, Lia!
That saying belongs to my grandmother who didn’t want me to follow in the footsteps of my grandfather who died from alcohol :))
R.I.P ( ✖╭╮✖ )
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Ah… I am sorry to hear about your grandfather. But love the detail about your grandmother. Thanks for sharing that. 🤗🙏👌💛
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( ∩ˇωˇ∩)
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Good twist at the end.
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Thanks ( •◡•)
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This is incredibly raw, beautiful and dark.
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I’m glad you think that ٩(ˊᗜˋ*)و
Thanks 🙂
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You’re welcome. I’d be really happy if you’d check out some of my work, too. 💘
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Hmm… I click on your name and it says “6pm.wordpress.com doesn’t exist”
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Nah, by6pm.art is my website! All good though!
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Thanks for that heads up. I was able to fix that in my settings. I didn’t know it was a problem, so you were a huge help!
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“What you don’t pick up you don’t end up holding” I don’t know why but I love this line!
Nice ending 😉
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Thank you ( •◡•)
Simplicity is key, I guess :))
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For some reason, this post triggered a feeling of happiness within me. I don’t know why. But, it did.
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Glad to hear that ᵔ ᴥ ᵔ
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Golden ticket to the Dark Poetry club
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( ͡°( ͡° ͜ʖ( ͡° ͜ʖ ͡° ) ͜ʖ ͡°) ͡°)
Welcome
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This is so dark and wonderfully written. Love the ending. 🤭
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Thank you, Sheri (◕‿◕)
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You’re so welcome! Thank you for sharing it. Have a beautiful day.🌹
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(๑ →‿←๑)
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The last line changed everything. Your writing is full of dark surprises like that.
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\(^O^)/ Thanks!
Much appreciated 🙂
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I love your stories and poems extra much when you read them. Your accent, tone, and cadence is perfect for your unique genre. Read more!
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If that’s what you want, then I’ll do it.
Pretty soon too
三三ᕕ( ᐛ )ᕗ
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Please do! You are unusually talented. Let the world not only see your mind but hear it.
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Hopefully they won’t cringe too much
٩(ᐛ )و
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Nope. No one will cringe. Your voice and accent provide a perfect interpretation of your excellent, unique, and disturbing brand of writing.
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I’ll do my best then.
It’s a promise
ヘ(* 。* ヘ)
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A poem to freeze the soul, then to move on with the hope that this is one act of violence that may be all that he needs to leave hatred behind.
Gwen.
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If only hatred would be so easy to leave behind in real life as it is in some fantasies…
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